When they got the pier William saw a magnificent boat it had a pool a mini bar and deluxe bed
 Matthew said "your ship is just to the right of the one you are staring at" when William saw the real boat he knew it was going to be a long trip the boat was all molded and there was rats and bugs riding on board the ship. The bugs looked Chinese and they had their own little suitcases William muttered "I think there going back home to china."
Andy
3/29/2010 12:39:09 pm

I have made some corrections, especially punctuation. Read it carefully and then go back and make similar changes in your other chapters.


When they got to the pier William saw a magnificent boat, it had a pool a mini bar and deluxe bed. Matthew said, "Your ship is just to the right of the one you are staring at." When William saw the real boat he knew it was going to be a long trip. The boat was all molded and there were rats and bugs riding on board the ship. The bugs looked Chinese and they had their own little suitcases. William muttered, "I think they're going back home to China."

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